NEW Script- Adapted for Draft 4

This is a new script I have made that is for draft 4. Given the fact that I had to change the opening scene, I wrote in a new sequence in a car somewhere mysterious, with the same 3 characters. The rest of the short film will play out the same as draft 3 overall.

[Scene 1]

(In a car, dark environment)  (Slow techno music in the background)

Man 1: Alex I heard you have a free house on Saturday is that true?

Alex: Uh yeah man

Man 1: Oh right can we do like a little gathering or something?

Alex: We could do but we’d have to keep it quite low key, because my dad put a safe upstairs, from all the jewellery from Sunny’s wedding

Man 1: Oh. We better be invited yeah (Looks slightly above the camera)

Alex: Yeah man off course, course

(End of scene 1, diegetic music slows down)

[Title sequence]

Atmospheric horror music begins to play, non diegetic

AB18 Studios Present

Intrusion

(Scene 2)

Two masked thieves are walking towards the camera and

they stand still and stare forward at something

Man two pulls out a corkscrew

Man two clenches his fist

Both of them walk across the road to the house, and walk to the gate

They begin to break into the gate and remove the lock from the door

They kick down the gate and pick the lock from the back door of the house

Man 1: We need to go upstairs to the safe

Man 2: Yeah let’s go

(Scene 3)

Non-diegetic moody, ambient music changes to similar music, but slower and darker

They begin to walk to the stairs, once reached they stare up into the darkness at the top of the stairs  

Once up the stairs, they open the door leading to the safe

They open an additional door in which the safe is presumed to be

[Scene 4]

Non-diegetic music stops playing

Straight cut to Alex in bed hears a loud bang 

Alex: What was that?

Thrilling-horror like score sounds

Alex walks over to the room, and peers round the corner

He then slowly walks over the to slightly open door

Man 1 pulls him into the door

Cut to a shot of man 1, holding the candle to his face (editing changes to a red threshold/added filters to change the colour) (It’s actually a nightmare of Alex’s)

Alex wakes up from the nightmare and breathes heavily from the nightmare; he then looks to his right

The two men are standing there, man one has a knife in his hand, and he then lunges forward and presumably kills Alex

Film cuts with midway action of man 1 stabbing Alex

Credits begin to play out

Directed by Ashley banger

Staring Aayush Joshi

Starring Ashley Banger

and Alex Patrick-Smith

Edited by Ashley Banger

Story by Ashley Banger

Director of photography Benoit Ganesan

Produced by Jamie Gerrish